Talk:Jak 4: The Darkness Within/@comment-213.120.234.146-20160731232836/@comment-30398052-20170719092210

Indeed; we all want it.

I'm really happy to see this full detailed story and to see that you've put time and effort into this. I do encounter one big mistake in it: It's too realistic. Going to scool, crying, police, ... It's the same mistake I've made when I was creating Jak 4 and reworking on TLF. Jak and Daxter is a fantasy game, but I kept adding human elements.

I know you'll be asking yourself now what I've made; well I wrote it in Dutch, my own language, my English is just not good enough to translate it myself and I don't know if I'm ever going to publish that. And also, I keep making changes to it so I have more of the Jak and Daxter feeling.

I'm not saying the story is bad; it just doesn't quite fit into the Jak and Daxter series and after all, nothing can be worse than TLF. So I'm more likely encouraging you to keep on thinking. As I see it, it doesn't have to be in the same Jak and Daxter theme. It might be easier for you to let your fantasy free and create your own imaginary world with a hero as you like him to be.

Also, it would be a good idea to divide this story into multiple articles so it wouldn't be so slow (for my computer at least)