User blog:FreezingTNT/I need an adviser for Finding Marlin...

Hello, you know me as the creator of the Finding Marlin page. I started working on it in 2016 after I watched Finding Dory in cinemas, and it first started out as a ripoff of both Finding Dory and Ice Age. Click here and you'll see what I mean.

Because of its popularity on the Fanon Wiki and others, I decided that Finding Marlin should be a real film made by Pixar Animation Studios. But, someone on the Ice Age Fanon Wiki pointed out that my idea is a ripoff of Finding Dory and Ice Age and told me that if I wanted the film to be real then I would have to make an original and creative plot.

When that user was on hiatus until that December, I wrote most of the plot as a new contributor (because my old IP address was blocked back then), and when he returned, he gave me more suggestions, but I didn't accept a lot. My plot wasn't realistic (I don't mean realistic as in not cartoon-ish), so he fixed it so people can understand it better.

When he quit Wikia in 2017, I worked all alone with small suggestions from my younger brother.

On my vacation in the summer with my family, I realized that Dory is useless in the story and needs to affect the plot in some way, maybe even play a role in the sub-plot where Nemo and friends are searching for Marlin. In Finding Nemo, Dory played a huge role in Marlin's journey to find Nemo (for example, she was reading the mask while Marlin was distracting the anglerfish, and she also spoke whale, indirectly causing the whale to swallow them and bring them to Sydney).

One of the reasons I feel that Dory is useless in the story is because of a blue fish named Lincoln, whom she falls in love with. She doesn't change throughout the rest of the story and doesn't affect the sub-plot at all, and I'm currently planning to scrap Lincoln and his blue penguin friends because they barely affect the plot (like how the Tank Gang was put into the post-credits scene in Finding Dory because they didn't affect Dory's story at all).

Dory had some character development in Finding Dory and played a role in Marlin's adventure in Finding Nemo, so I believe that she needs to have some character development and also needs to affect the sub-plot in some way because she's one of the four main characters besides Marlin, Nemo, and Spike.

Nemo and Dory are still two of the three deuteragonists along with Spike (who is with Marlin), and I'm also planning to give Nemo some character development, because look at how he changed in Finding Nemo! With the support of the Tank Gang and especially Gill, Nemo changed from an afraid child into a fearless, well, child. Nemo was afraid when he tried to stop the filter for the first time and nearly got killed, but he was eventually brave enough to try to jam the filter again, and this time he succeeded.

The current change I have is to change this underlined scene into the other in italics:

Nemo, Dory, and the Tank Gang make a plan to find Marlin as they then travel. They travel too far and end up on the eastern coast of the South Island, where Gill finds a river and suggests that they go to the river because it would be quicker. As they enter the river, a bunch of blue penguins guide them to their leader, Lincoln, a blue tang, whom Dory falls in love with. Nemo asks Lincoln to help him find Marlin, so he and his blue penguin friends decide to help Nemo and his friends find Marlin.

''Nemo, Dory, and the Tank Gang make a plan to find Marlin as they then travel. They travel too far and end up on the eastern coast of the South Island, where Gill spots some of his old friends, a shoal of flying fish led by a middle-aged flying fish named Lincoln. Nemo asks them if they can help them find Marlin, and they agree. As everyone hops onto their backs, they flying fish then travel across the river.''

I'm also planning to give Nemo some character development, because look at how he changed in Finding Nemo! With the support of the Tank Gang and especially Gill, Nemo changed from an afraid child into a fearless, well, child. Nemo was afraid when he tried to stop the filter for the first time and nearly got killed, but he was eventually brave enough to try to jam the filter again, and this time he succeeded.

I was very lonely, and I wanted an adviser, so I asked a user for help on the subplot and discussed to him about character development. He pointed out that I should give out a climax to near the end of the subplot. I changed parts of the plot over and over again in the past, and I need help from someone who's smart, knows about character development, and even knows how to properly write a movie like mines (WindowsMyers2018's The Lion King Reborn does not count because it's basically a combination of The Lion King movies and The Lion Guard).

I need an adviser, to help me improve and give suggestions for Finding Marlin. Read these questions below:


 * 1) What does this character want?
 * 2) What does this character need?
 * 3) How do those want and need conflict with each other within the character?
 * 4) How do they conflict with the outside world?
 * 5) How do they conflict with other characters?
 * 6) How does the character change through those conflicts and how does the resolution affect them?
 * 7) What impact does that change have on everyone else?

Make sure to check out my own notes as well!

Do you know anyone who can help me out? Do you have some ideas for scenes and character development so I can properly write the character development for Nemo and make Dory important to the story?